Ben,
I find this free write particularly interesting. You've taken several different places, names, people, etc., yet manuevering them toward your prime focal point, your subject: writing. I think your opening line is exclusively fascinating. In all honesty, I tend to believe that opening sentence would make one heck of a poem title. How about you get started on that ;). I enjoy the feel of uncertaininy spreading throughout the text, which also suggests pinches of irony measuring back to the narrator's/author's uncertain/unstable relationship with writing. In this draft, you have contructed some really nice parallel's between ideas of distance and (un)familiarity. I would say you are off to good start with this draft, and I certainly believe you have several elements working together (and against each other) to help create an interesting poem.
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