Entry based on the calisthenic exercise we did in class on Wednesday (26th)
Life can create cancer-producing substances, its own
body, its breast, with which it presses and tightens
surfacing at the crest of pain: Fascinating 'secret'
drives us to follow the circular full skirt rustling
like stiff cream- powder with stones or with bone
mortar and pestle mixed, animal blood-neither hand
of the squirrel, nor teeth of the beaver-eaten
with relish after treatment from 2, 4-D, flapping,
sucking: a blood-loving bat. Led out of doors,
doused in water, rolled in snow, no star or cocksure
quarterback You panty archer. Have him some children?
I am going to congratulate him of her marry
age, dirty work with my own hands. The door
is shurt. Having taken my leave, I was going.
Bending my body over my glowing book, "Two
Hegelian Jokes", maybe just one: T stands
for the convential shape of the television antenna.
Sydney,
ReplyDeleteYou pulled some really strong language from the Calisthenic exercise and the resulting writing has some interesting juxtapositions. The “full skirt rustling like stiff cream-powder” seguing into the imagery of stones and bones mixed in a mortar and pestle with animal blood makes for attention getting imagery. I think it loses a little momentum when it moves into the lines about the bat. That sequence seems to be a bit of a stumbling block there, because it picks up again after with the line beginning “Led out of doors”. Of course, this being early play with nearly random language allows for a lot of room for cutting and expanding. I am looking forward to seeing how you might work with the language here and what you might generate in future versions.