Week 3, Sign Inventory 1

"And Then She Stabbed Him"  p.83 in our course text

• draft includes interesting language, such as: "sugaring your face in polyps", violins swelling behind your rickety hospital bed", "stroking the trophy's head" etc...
• the draft also works well-carefully-to include attention grabbing concrete imagery: manipulating words that are usually not associated with others. For example: "Maybe you're a cutter [...] / breaking the mirror in your too-clean bathroom, / shredding like cheese the skin at the bend of your wrist. " This line makes my body squirm, regardless if I want it to or not. 
• The writer does well with making his/her audience feel uncomfortable throughout the piece, which works well to the writers advantage-it keeps the reader reading.
• The writer also does a nice job with making sure to add specifics, including proper nouns, qualities, physical senses, and descriptions (concrete imagery).