Peer Response 2, Week 8: Elizabeth Wood's Free Entry Spring Break Week

I think you are really on to something with this piece Elizabeth. The use of interrogative sentences at the beginning of the entry work well here in regards to the overall tone of the poem. The back-to-back repetitious questions also provide the reader with a closer relationship to the narrator--feeling more concerned about what is taking place, where we are, what is going to happen, etc... What's more, I notice that you have some staunchly words and language working throughout the draft, but not too much so as the language becomes dense and overbearing. I admit, I am jealous of the lines: "Her legs won't be calm, and she emits nanny goat moans...", and "machine chatter", "eating time with the tumor", "the his his spit of oxygen feed"-- Love these!! I also think you did a nice job with the end piece of the draft. I seem to like how the last two sentences leave the reader with a question (packed with uncertainty, slightly rhetorical, and anxious), then you answer in the last sentence following. The last sentence is very postmodern, "nowhere near, no answers there". The feeling of nothing, no answers. I would really like to see you work this free entry into a longer draft, because I think you have several elemental working well together to construct an interesting piece.