Peer Response 1, Week 12 for Candis' Improv'- Week 12

First of all, I find your improvisation title quite humerous. I like the fact that you took a piece(especially a work of Emily Dickinson's) and created something entirely of your own. Not only did you alter the format/layout of your improvisational piece from that of Dicinson's, but you also take your own route in regards to the context of the poem, making all elements completely yours. I like the idea you have working here throughout the piece, however, I find the piece to be lacking a little something. Perhaps a little more specificity? Or perhaps a little more information (without saying too much). By this, I mean that in Dickinson's piece, she is able to provide the reader with enough information (although marginal)in a way that suits best suits her... a very complex and difficult task indeed. Nonetheless, I think your improv' piece offers originality and inventiveness, and I wouldn't mind seeing an expanded draft.