Christine,
I find this free write entry particularly interesting because of its originality, ingenuity, and inventiveness. Within this text, as a reader, I gather very clear descriptions of concrete-specific imagery, and also the many different scene depictions described by the narrator. I really like how you begin the first stanza as a type of introduction, without being too 'prosy'. I also feel as if the first stanza acts as a nice segue into your following stanza, the stanza in which our narrator really unfold and spills bits-and-pieces of "girl talk", and life at a type of summer camp. I do, however, wish there were more to this draft. I wouldn't mind knowing more information, more imagery, more about the people and the places within the last stanza. I also would like to know more about 'girl talk', and why this particular girl talk is different from other girl talk, etectera.
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